What can u say about the structure of this history?

Are there any words, phrases or constructions that are different from the standard?





“When Henry VIII called Hampton court palace home, it was one of the most magnificent palaces in England, the nerve centre of court life and poltics.


In Its dark corridors alliances were forged, in its scented gardens plots hatched.


As a courtier, if you valued your life, you needed to stay alert.


Immerse yourself in the drama of the Tudor court and discover a palace of majesty, romance and extravagances”

What can u say about the structure of this history?
Not an easy question to answer. For a start there is some erratic capitalisation. For example it should be 'Hampton Court Palace' since that is the name of the palace. Also 'In Its dark corridors' should be 'In its dark corridors'. (This might be because you've typed it in quickly. It happens to Me too).





It might also be better to say 'extravagance' rather than 'extravagances'.





What are you comparing this quotation too? It seems as though it is on a tourist brochure or something like that.





As this is in the Words %26amp; Wordplay section, I'm guessing that it might be to do with the words that conjure up images of plotting and scheming. Darkened corridors where courtiers stood exchanging the latest gossip, ornate gardens wherein courtiers seemingly taking a pleasant evening's stroll were again gossiping and plotting.





However, it is incorrect to call it the nerve centre of court life and politics. The Tudor court was wherever the monarch happened to be. Henry VIII had more than one palace, and the court followed him around. That might sound pedantic but it's important to note it was the people and the monarch who made the court. Hampton Court was merely one of the venues.
Reply:Sounds too Mills and Boon I am afraid, i am not sure whether you are asking for it to be rephrased.

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